初稿（30min）刚开始写作一定不要计时，写熟了以后再加快速度Inmyopinion,teenagersshouldtakeseveraldifferentjobsbeforetakeacareerinalongrun.becausethosejobexperiencesarebenefitthemalotandhelptheyhavebetterpreparation.Ononehand,thosedifferentjobshelpteenagersbecomemoreexperiencedandmature.Firstly,thosejobsprovidessomeconsiderablydifferentthink-way,andthoseenablethemtoconsidereverythinginmorekindofview,whichdohelpthemmakeabetterchosewhentheproblemiscoming.Secondly,moreworkexperiencebroadentheirvisionandtheymayfindthefieldtheygoodatandwanttoconcentrateonnoticeablyeasily.Ontheotherhand,doingdifferentjobsbringmoreopportunitiestothem.Thosefriendsandpartnerstheyfindinthosejobsmaybecomethoseimportantpeopleintheirlongtermcareer.Nothingismoreimportanttocareerstartingthanagoodinterpersonalrelationship.Besides,bythoseworkingtimebefore,teenagersshouldgetsomemoneytoliveon,sothattheywillnothavepressurefrommakingalivingandthisconsequentlyhelpthemtodowhattheywanttodo.Through,somedifferentjobsbeforegatstartyourowncareerneedsometimeandyouwillbeginyourbusinesslaterthanwhostartdirectly.But,yourworkwillbemuchmoreefficient,becauseyoudigoutyourabilitiesfromavarietyofjobs.Insummary,that’sallreasonswhyIdosurethatthoseteenagerswhodosomedifferentjobsbeforestarttheirowncareerswillsuccessfasterandtheirbusinesswillgofarther.不知道你们老师怎么跟你们讲的，我上课的时候老实说只要是问“Doyouagreeordisagree”的问题都要从两方面来讲，具体如下：审题，明确题目的范围，条件，寻找分类的突破点对于这篇文章而言范围是youngpeople条件是TAKEseveraljobsbeforeacareer突破点whatkindofjobsdotheytake根据突破点从正反两方面来讨论主题如果是些对career有帮助的jobs当然应该参加如果是些没用的工作就没必要参加提纲、开头：……主题：观点一：应该……可以增加经验积累宝贵的人际关系观点二：不应该……1.不停地变换工作不利promotion结尾：……写文章：观点很展开都还挺好的，除了语法有些问题以外，最大的问题是没有说服力（缺例证）修改稿：Nowadays,aincreasingnumberofteenagerswouldliketotakeseveraldifferentkindsofjobbeforetakeacareerinalongterm.Somepeopleassumethatit’stotallyawasteoftime.However,inmyopinion,teenagersshouldtakemoredifferentkindsofjobbecausethosejobexperiencesarebenefitthemalotandhelptheyhavebetterpreparationforalong-termcareer.