第一次HYPERLINK"http://www.pigai.org/?a=modifyPassword"张静凡(5分)|HYPERLINK"http://bbs.pigai.org/"论坛New|HYPERLINK"javascript:;"皮肤|HYPERLINK"http://www.pigai.org/?a=logout"退出当前位置：HYPERLINK"http://www.pigai.org/"我的作文->Lifeisajourney-第254145号作文LifeisajourneyEverybodyhasdifferentlifeaseverybodyhasdifferentjourney.Akindoflifeisakindofjourney.Duringthejourney,maybewearehappyandjoyful,maybewearesadandupset.But,whateverhappened,ourlifestillgoesahead.Ourparentsgiveuslife.Atthesametime,theyareourbestimportantcompanionsonthejourney.Lifeisajourney,andourparentsteachusruleandsomebasicofthejourney.Duringthejourney,wewillfeeldelightful,sad,self-confident,upsetandsoon.Theroadofjourneyisn'talwaysflat,beautifulandinteresting.Ourfriends,ourteachersarealsoimportantpersonsduringthejourney.Theygiveusheipwhenwewereintrouble.Sometimes,theyalsomakeussad.theyevenpreventusfromgettingsuccess.Thejourneycan'tbepredicted.Lifeisajourney,aunusualjourney.It'saadventure.Therearemanypeople,manythings,manysightsduringthejourney.Wecanmakeitintomeaningful,wonderfuljourney.Andwealsocouldmakeitmeaningless,boringjourney.Everythingdependsonourselves.Thelife,thejourneybelongstome.字数:187提交次数:HYPERLINK"http://www.pigai.org/index.php?c=write&a=history&eid=3435125"1显示:选择词汇HYPERLINK"javascript:;"作文评分HYPERLINK"javascript:;"题目要求66HYPERLINK"http://www.pigai.org/index.php?c=v2&a=write&eid=3435125&rid=254145"继续完善排名:第5(共5)，最高分:81，最低分:66词汇:句子:篇章结构:内容相关:HYPERLINK"http://bbs.pigai.org/t13952.html"评语：从句使用不熟练；文中词汇表达较丰富恰当，学术词汇使用稍显不足；文章上下文衔接不是很紧凑，结构缺少组织按句点评HYPERLINK"http://bbs.pigai.org/t26384-1-1.html"标签详解第1段HYPERLINK"javascript:;"段评段评:1.1Everybodyhasdifferentlifeaseverybodyhasdifferentjourney.[教师点评][语法检查]建议把hasdifferentjourney改成hasadifferentjourney/hasthedifferentjourney(MissingWord)[低频警示]everybodyhasdifferentjourney在语料库中无此用法，疑似HYPERLINK"http://bbs.pigai.org/t10917-1-1.html"中式英语[搭配统计]动名搭配have...journey在教材中出现过HYPERLINK"http://www.pigai.org/corpus/snt/?q=have%20jo