大学英语四级考试写作典型例文精彩点评(二)ItcanbediscernedthattheAmericanstudentsprefertoreadthepopularnovelratherthanotherkindofbooks,suchasthenonpopular(unpopular)novel,thebooksoftechnology,poemandsoon.Thepercentageofthepopularnovelcurrent(currently)isabout68.2%.Otherkindofnovels'current(currently)is,reletively(relatively),about16.8%,8.3%,and5.2%.Itisnothardtothinkoutwhythepopularnovelscanattractsomanystudents.Thepopularnovelisinteresting,andnotsoabstractasbooksthatfullofthemathmaticformulate(mathematicformulae).However,asuniversitystudents,studyisthefirsttaskforustodo.Soweshouldpaymoreattentiontothebooksaboutourmajor.Fictionsmaycolorourlife,butitcannotbethekeypartofourstudyinglife.Personally,Iwouldliketospendmyfreetimeinreadingbooksaboutmymajor,suchastechnologydigests,computernewspaper...BecauseIwantdoto(删掉)agoodjobinmysubjects.Fortunately,mydreamscometrue,meanwhile,I'vegainedotherthings--Ifound(havefounded)asolidbasicknowledgeaboutmymajor(加破折号)makemefeeleasytocontrivetheelectroniccircuitwhichhavetobedoneduringourbacheloryears.Thankstothosebooks!点评：(1)切题。(2)论证比较有力，表达思想清楚。(3)文字通顺，连贯性较好，但有个别语言错误。注：文中划线部分为原文的一些明显语言错误，括号里的为修改建议，为保持原文面貌，对于结构没有做过多改动。2003年6月考试四级作文题：AnEye-WitnessAccountofaTrafficAccident假设你在某日某时某地目击一起车祸，就此写一份见证书。见证书须包括以下几点：1、车祸发生的时间及地点;2、你所见到的车祸情况;3、你对车祸原因的分析。例1.(2分段)At9:00,Jan.20,2003,Ieye-witnessatrafficaccidentinDongfangStreet.Iseethata(an)oldpeopleishitted(hit)byacar.Inmyopinion,therapiddriveristhemainreason,buttheoldpeoplealsohashiserror.点评：(1)字数明显不够，考试大尽管都点题了，但只有三句话。(2)有语法错误。例2.(5分段)Inmyopinion,thedriverofBenzautoshouldbeblamedon(for)thetrafficaccident.Itwashisdrunkdrivingthatresultedinthisaccident.Itisnot(no)doubtthatthetrafficaccidentisahigh(hot)topicinthemodern(modern)society,differentpeoplehavedifferentattitude(attitudes)tothis.Whenitcome(comes)totheaccident,peoplethinkitresponsibleforthedriver.ButlastSundayIsee(saw)a(an)accident.Awomancrossedastreetwhenacarturn(turnedat)thecrossing.itistoolatetostopthecar,Thewomenwasbad(badly)hurt.Thepeoplewhowaswalkingalongthest